Review of Gunnhildr

Gunnhildr©Mazjojo

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Synopsis:

On the age of Kurukhsetra, war has becoming needs. People killing each other and conquering territories just to survive. The war can only be stopped by The Chosen Warriors as The Goddess sent. Kurewa Hangard, The prince of Kaurava clan is one of the chosen warriors along with his best friend, Kuraginn will find the way to stop the war along their journey!
_{(Sorry that I just copy paste it. I'm too lazy to make a new one, but I edit it a little)}


Comments:

_{(Please mind that this is purely personal opinion, what I say might or might not agreeable with yours)}
Not bad for taking names from Hindustan's legends, but unfortunately the story is purely original, and not related with the origin story of Kurewa (Kaurava) itself. I say this because I'm a big fan of Hindustan's legends, and it's a pity that the story doesn't even have the slightest hint from it. Well, despite of that, he's quite successful in giving quite obvious BL hints. And honestly, that 2 pages of sex scene he made for 'neutralizing' those BL hints, is definitely has no effect at all. _{(Aww c'mon, Kurewa came right after seeing Kuraginn's face when he barge in to his room? Any fujyoushi can get the hint! lol)}



Critiques:

First of all, let me salute mazjojo for making the comic for only 3 weeks. BUT, it was made it in such a hurry, that the pictures in the comic seem unstable (some are good, and some not). There're too many black parts that merge in the pictures, there should be thin white line to separate it. Like in some part, the characters hair and clothes merge into one another.
The body anatomy is fine, but like I've been telling mazjojo so many times; it would be way much better if he learn more about it, especially how to make a define muscles well.
Overall, the paneling, effects, BGs, are great. The story is similar to RPG shonen manga theme, but it has some fresh air come out of it.


Glossary:

Kurewa:
Taken from Kaurava (Kurawa [Indo ver]) is 100 brothers and 1 sister born by queen Gandhari, they're the antagonist characters in Mahabharata and Bharatayudha. In the story developed in Indonesia, when the queen was walking down the castle's garden, she felt an urge to labor, and gave birth of a lump of meat. She's depressed and kicked the lump of meat, made it scattered into 101 pieces. Weeping to the Gods, why she was given such thing as her baby, a God (forgot which one) told her to cover those lump of meats with leaves and wait until the next morning The next morning, miracles happened; those meats turned into babies. The largest baby came from the largest lump of meat is the eldest son, Duryodhana.

In original India's version, it was told that queen Gandhari was unable to have any children for a long time and she eventually became pregnant, but did not deliver for two years, after which she gave birth to a lump of flesh. Vyasa (Byasa [Indo ver]), grandfather of Kaurava and Pandava, cut this lump into a hundred and one pieces, and these eventually developed into a hundred boys and one girl.

Hangard:
Maybe taken from Hanggada [Indo ver] or Angada [India ver] and originally come from Ramayan story (the timeline is before Mahabharata). He's the son of Vali (Subali/Sumali [Indo ver]) and nephew of Sugriva. He helped Rama find his wife Sita and fight her abductor, Ravana.

Kurukshetra:
Kurukshetra is a district in Haryana state of India. Kurukshetra earns its name from King Kuru, the ancestor of Kauravas and Pandavas. What makes it really important is the theory that this was where the Kurukshetra war of the Mahabharata was fought.


Sorry, Jo, I'm just itching to make this.